Open Creative Non-Fiction Writing

Dineh,

I really enjoyed reading this piece; it was highly amusing and very cleverly written. I wonder who it describes? Viola—is she an alter ego of the narrator from the first week? Is this to further characterize that narrator–to demonstrate her multifaceted nature? There’s a bit of youth and reckless fun in this piece; perhaps it might show as a her night time personality, or a flashback to a bit of her past. I don’t know how to really connect the two, but you might not want to. Is this about the same place from Week 1?

I think this would actually enrichen the character from week 1, if you attempted the connection. If so, you should work on a transition, how the narrator from week 1 hates getting up in the mornings—what do the mornings remind her of, represent to her? How did she come up with this Viola person? Etc.

I would like more about Viola’s experiences copy-writing, and in writing odd jobs throughout her life, as it seems to have played an important role in shaping her character. Her boss is ephemeral; can you make him concrete? Is he balding? Is he kind? He’s comes off as a Keelber elf here–the one thing he says. I think it would be fruitful to juxtapose the fantasy like nature of this piece with something that jolts it back down to earth, ie. I loved the line “Though, technically speaking, the job description leaned far more toward copy-writing.” It demonstrates a sense of humor on part of the author, poking fun at her own character, herself, which is always valuable. My comments in-line: CNF_Week3_NtantisoThirdPerson – JP Comments.